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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

#immigration #impact #society #consequences
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It is often seen that
people
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 migrate from
one
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country
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 to another for various reasons and higher education and good job opportunities is
one
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 of them. It could affect society in a positive way as folks from different nations bring their values and traditions with them and share them with the natives. To embark on,
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 of the biggest reasons why immigrants chose to leave their
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 behind is for a better future. Most of the immigrants, pursue
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 studies in the hope to get a well-paid job so that they can fulfil their dreams as well as help families back home. A survey conducted in 2016 showed some dramatic results as 78
people
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 out of 100 chose western countries like the USA, Canada, Australia for higher education. At the end of the day, everyone has some goals in their
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 and moving from
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 nation to another could change
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's
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 dramatically.
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, immigrants bring some valuable things with them and
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 of them is their valuable
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 lessons and traditions.
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 affects the society of that
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 in a positive way,
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, folks from poor countries are blessed with a big heart and their
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 experiences make them unique and down to earth, which obviously is missing in a local
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 and they learn it from them over time and
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 better society emerges. All in all, it's a win-win situation for both parties. To conclude,
people
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 immigrate for a better
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 and I think it's only worth it if they have an idea about the
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 they are moving to. It's better to consider all aspects before moving to new a
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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