Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Health problems are one of the most important issues facing us today and
children
’s
obesity
is no exception. Many people claim that the government assumes responsibility for childhood
obesity
.
However
, to my way of thinking, I disagree with
this
statement because
this
child health problem is to blame
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parents
and child personnel. On the one hand,
parents
' choice is one of the main reasons for the overweight.
Firstly
,
parents
have a poor choice of diet for their kids. Undoubtedly,
parents
give
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diets to
children
such
as greasy dishes.
Moreover
, they give adolescents permission to comfort eat.
Children
are allowed to eat bigger portions than they need.
On the other hand
, childhood
obesity
consists of kids’ personal.
To begin
with,
children
have unhealthy eating habits. After school, they usually grab a snack on the go to satisfy their cravings. Alternatively, adolescents lose control over their eating behaviour.
In other words
, they have a habit of eating large amounts of processed food or drinking too many sugary drinks.
Secondly
, lack of physical activity is to blame for
obesity
among
children
. For the most part,
children
have a sedentary lifestyle. They usually stay at home to watch television or to play games.
Therefore
, very few calories are burned and are stored by the body as fat. In conclusion,
parents
and
children
’s decisions are to blame for kids being overweight.
Nevertheless
, it is not an unsolvable problem. In my opinion, it is necessary that
parents
make a fuss over
children
’s eating habits and lifestyle.
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