These days, an increasing number of people in many cities know little about their neighbors and do not have a sense of community. What do you think are the causes and what solutions can you suggest?
The singular countable noun population follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.
The spelling of neighborhood is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
The noun phrase participation seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.
The noun phrase young community seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The word society doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
It appears that the comma after such as is unnecessary. Consider removing it.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
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