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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effect will this have on society?

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Unfortunately, criminals tend to commit crimes again once they release from the lock-up. There are plenty of reasons for it.
This
 essay will discuss some of the reasons and causes of it with relevant examples.
Firstly
, even after the completion of terms, prisoners don't get acceptance in society. Because
people
 look at them as unwanted
people
. It leads them again towards the terrible activity.
In addition
, due to their past ,records it
also
 closes the doors of employment. The reason is that employers prefer
people
 of good standing in their organisation. So that, they feel betray and it forces them to do the crime again. To illustrate, as per the article published
last
 month in one of the renowned newspapers' Times of India' seventy per cent convicts were involved in the awful acts again after completion of their term.
As a result
 of
this
 the crime rate increases in the city. For their bread and butter, they are left with no other option but to earn money by hook and crook. A consequence of it will
also
 create an atmosphere of an unhealthy and imperfect society.
People
 get scared that they might be the
next
 target of the culprit.
Furthermore
, the public stops going outside the home late at night, because they don't want to risk their lives.
For example
, in my town person is afraid to go outside late in the dark, because there are hundreds of chain snatchers on the street. To conclude, even though the culprit passed their period of terms, commits evil activities again as he is left with no other option that leads to unrest in the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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