In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the present day, the presence of fast

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society has been increasingly popular among people

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compared to the past.

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kind of

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can result in damage

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health

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the health

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of the individuals not only in short term but

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in long term, resulting in serious

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disorders and

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in fatal

illness

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. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the idea of governments and authorities create laws and fees stricter to control the presence of these products.

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and foremost, fast foods can be found

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affordable prices,

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which contributes to

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ample access by people,

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, is much cheaper to purchase

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type of product than natural and fresh

food

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, famous companies

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McDonalds

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are able to sell servings of French fries for popular prices which become the

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option for some individuals who do not have much money.

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this sort

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of items

are

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much more convenient and faster to be consumed in compared with the

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necessary to prepare a dish at home.

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, workers with a hectic routine would save

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time consuming

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time-consuming

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fast

food

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instead

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of preparing a natural and healthy meal. An example of

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would be workers, who

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in a metropolitan city, without a work-life balance that would rather consume fast

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to spare

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they save

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but they endanger their

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since the high consumption of sugar, fat and sodium can increase the number of diseases

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as stroke, cancers and blood pressure disorders.

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, the number of establishments with

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type of

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is ubiquitous. They can be easily traced not only in the majority of

centers

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at schools which leads to the high consumption by children, who should have a balanced and nutritional diet since they are in constant development.

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, some international research shows that children that intake fast

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at school have more likelihood to be an obese adult. The more intake of processed foods, the worst the quality of

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of these citizens. For these reasons, I strongly agree with the need of having strict laws and

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to control

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alarming situation. In conclusion, fast foods are popular among people of all ages due to cheap prices,

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the facility

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of preparing, and the number of stores

sells

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that sells

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type of product. They can present some facilities but on other hand, they are tremendously harmful to

health

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, higher taxes imposed by governments should be priorities.