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The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet
It is true that there are a wide number of benefits and numerous drawbacks which the Net brings. Despite some obvious disadvantages of the Network, I think that these are outweighed by the advantages. On the one hand, there are a number of major problems associated with using the Internet. The
first
 drawback is
this
 trend would have an adverse impact on the users’ health problems. People keeping their eyes glued to screens for several hours are likely to suffer from eye strain, short-sightedness, or obesity. Another negative effect is more time spent on online entertainment means less time for other activities,
such
 as study, sports as well as communication, which negatively affects the low academic result and causes social isolation that seriously affects their later lives.
On the other hand
, I believe that the merits are more significant than
such
 drawbacks.
Firstly
, the computer network helps us acquire up-to-date information to enrich our knowledge and learn a wide range of valuable skills. Children,
for example
, know more about animals and their natural habitats by watching discovery channels on the iPad.
Also
, the IELTS Class Language Center organizes webinars for learners all of
ages
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 to gain access to education and enjoy the benefits of free online courses to improve their English.
Secondly
, the Internet sparks children’s creativity and imagination. A child,
for instance
, can know how to conduct simple experiments by viewing educational programmes like Best of Science or VTV2.
Finally
, we have more opportunities to make friends from all over the world by using social networking sites
such
 as Facebook, Zalo or Twitter. In conclusion, I would argue that the Internet brings more benefits than negative points.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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