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Some people think that when a person travels into different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a number of people who believe that when individuals
travel
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 to divergent destinations and convictions they have to respect and modify themselves with the local community.I,
however
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, wholeheartedly agree with the given statement on the basis of maintaining mandatory social
order
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 and opportunity to experience strange convictions for
passengers
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.
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 with, the main reason is that maintaining mandatory social
order
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 is a determining factor to law enforcement in the destination country,regardless of respect to host nations
passengers
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 can not enjoy their
travel
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 despite not being obligated they might face some warning from police and in charge persons so it is immensely necessary for travellers to be obeyed to rules,
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 to maintain social
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 and
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 to pursue their
travel
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 without any tension.so it mutually benefits for both host country and travellers. Having said that,
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, maintain mandatory social
order
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 are not the only causative factor in
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 respect.Another compelling argument is the opportunity for
passengers
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 to become cosmopolitan and experience a wide range of customs,cultures,beliefs,cuisine,nature and religion.as a consequence a person has an abundance of information about different countries despite their adaption to divergent customs and practices.
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, cosmopolitan persons are more flexible,experienced,patient and efficient for society.and if the government encourages people to
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 more often,
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 the future community will be more vibrant and experience than nowadays.
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,people of developed countries who had the opportunity to put the budget to
travel
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 to different resorts are more satisfied and welfare but
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 they can manage to be a better human resource for the community. To conclude, I personally take the view that it is ethically acceptable to adapt to local convictions and civilization.because of the rewarding ,
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 it brings like maintaining social security and
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 as well as make
passengers
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 more experienced and cosmopolitan for the society.
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