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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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nowadays many
students
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 and pupils are struggling with their financial problems, and they have to work and study simultaneously, I believe
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 issue has brought so many adverse impacts on
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 of
education
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, but it can be solved by taking special measures. it is obvious that many
students
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 who work, while studying have money financial problems and expenses to meet, one common cause is the high cost of
education
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, fundamentally many universities and colleges require high amounts of tuition,
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, these
students
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 have to work to pay
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for their
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 University and college fees, in another word, they are working to pay their cost of living expenses, as follows: those
students
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 that are study away from their hometown and if they come from middle-class family their expenditure is double, there is no doubt these pupils that come from the poor stratum of society should sacrifice their
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,
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, they are working to pay their accommodation food entertainment e.t.c. I think
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 problem of the
students
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 eventually gives rise to low quality of
education
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, it should be solved on the government level. I will point out one possible solution to
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 problem, the authorities could make higher
education
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 free by implementing a new policy,
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, by raising the budget and supporting universities not only will it make the
education
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 system accessible for everyone but it will eventually reduce the number of working
students
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. All in all, I strongly believe the lack of financial resources results in
students
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 working, but
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 situation can be solved by lowering the number of expenses
students
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 have to meet.

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