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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Write at least 250 words

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nowadays many
students
 and pupils are struggling with their financial problems, and they have to work and study simultaneously, I believe
this
 issue has brought so many adverse impacts on
quality
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the quality
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 of
education
, but it can be solved by taking special measures. it is obvious that many
students
 who work, while studying have money financial problems and expenses to meet, one common cause is the high cost of
education
, fundamentally many universities and colleges require high amounts of tuition,
consequently
, these
students
 have to work to pay
their
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for their
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 University and college fees, in another word, they are working to pay their cost of living expenses, as follows: those
students
 that are study away from their hometown and if they come from middle-class family their expenditure is double, there is no doubt these pupils that come from the poor stratum of society should sacrifice their
education
,
besides
, they are working to pay their accommodation food entertainment e.t.c. I think
this
 problem of the
students
 eventually gives rise to low quality of
education
thus
, it should be solved on the government level. I will point out one possible solution to
this
 problem, the authorities could make higher
education
 free by implementing a new policy,
for instance
, by raising the budget and supporting universities not only will it make the
education
 system accessible for everyone but it will eventually reduce the number of working
students
. All in all, I strongly believe the lack of financial resources results in
students
 working, but
this
 situation can be solved by lowering the number of expenses
students
 have to meet.
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