You are going to organise a family party next week at your home. You want to invite a friend to this party. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to attend the party. In your letter, • explain why you are organising the party • describe what you are planning to do • say why you want your friend to come to the party

Hello E'zoza I hope you are doing well! I am
exited
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excited
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to let you know that I am having a family
party
at my home next week and I would love for you to come.
This
party
is to celebrate my 15th birthday, and my family and I thought it would be a great idea to have a small
celebrate
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celebration
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. We are planning to have some games, play birthday
musics
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music
kinds of music
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, and enjoy
a
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nice national
foods
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food
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and
big
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a big
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, pink cake. We
also
plan to decorate the
party
room with purple balloons and wonderful decorations. There will be plenty of delicious food, and maybe even some karaoke. I really want
to
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you to be there because
this
party
would not be magnificent without you. We have shared so many good times together, and it would mean a lot to me if you could join in
this
really really special celebration. Please let me know if you can make it. I will be sure to save a spot for you Best wishes Laziza
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a brief sentence to conclude the letter after 'Please let me know if you can make it', such as 'I'm looking forward to your reply.'
coherence cohesion
Try to check minor grammatical errors and refine sentences for better clarity, such as 'We are planning to have some games, play birthday music, and enjoy nice national foods and a big, pink cake.'
coherence cohesion
Make sure every paragraph focuses on a single idea to make your letter even more coherent. For example, combine descriptions related to decorations in one paragraph.
task achievement
Consider explaining briefly why the family proposed the idea of the party to make the context a bit clearer.
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The tone of the letter is very warm and appropriate for inviting a friend.
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The letter effectively covers the main points including the purpose of the party, activities planned, and the reason for the friend's invitation.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are both very well done, contributing to the overall effectiveness of the letter.
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