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Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sugary drinks and foods are extremely unhealthy and are consumed in large quantities globally. In some countries, there has been a recent introduction of special taxes on these items. Some
people
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 believe that
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 is a good idea,
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 others do not agree. Both sides of the story shall be discussed in
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 essay. Taxation of sugary beverages and food items can cause a decrease in their levels of consumption.
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 ,in turn, can indirectly force
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 to lead healthier lives.
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, one bottle of
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 is said to contain about 9 teaspoons of
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. The daily recommended amount of
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 to be consumed is about 3 teaspoons. If there are laws that make
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 drinks inaccessible to the public, they will be healthier eventually. Having said that, forcing
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 to do what the government wants them to do, is never the right strategy. In a democratic country,
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 must feel like they have the freedom to make their
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.
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, not everyone has major health problems that require them to cut down on
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 completely. Depriving small children of the joy of eating sweets,
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, seems like a cruel notion. Even doctors recommend that the consumption of
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 in small quantities is perfectly fine.
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, even though a product may be banned or excessively taxed,
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 will always find ways to acquire it illegally.
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, these laws may create a class divide, where the rich are the only ones who can afford these goods. In conclusion, even though placing high taxes on sugary drinks and foods may cause
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 to lead healthier lifestyles, I am of the opinion that it is not a step in the right direction.
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 must be allowed to choose what they want to consume, irrespective of whether it is healthy or not.
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • processed foods
  • punitive measures
  • revenue
  • public health campaigns
  • awareness
  • government overreach
  • personal freedoms
  • unhealthy diets
  • economic burden
  • sugar-related health issues
  • consumer behavior
  • taxation
  • high levels of sugar
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