Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some humankind facing unlucky situations but still they continue living with it especially in unworthy work and lack of funds. While others argued at least to attempt and improve circumstances.

This

essay will tackle both views as well as my opinion.

To begin

with, putting yourself in a bad situation is hard but they do not have a choice is to accept

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it.

For example

, my friend is working in a company but before she will start they need to sign a contract agreement and unfortunately the one she signed in her country is not the same as when she came to Saudi Arabia.

Therefore

instead

of going back home to her

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she accepted it even though it is not her fault because she already started working and spent a lot of money on

this

job.

On the other hand

, some people argued that it is better to make an effort and to take some measures in order to develop

such

conditions.

For instance

, many people nowadays are trying to work in another country so that their life situation will upgrade,and earning more money.

Additionally

, in order to acquire new learning skills that are not available in their state and

also

to improve financial status.

Thus

, these people are full of determination and hardship because they want to enhance their current life situation.

Therefore

this

essay has discussed both views and I think having a poor condition is really out of our control sometimes but there is no harm in trying other things that will gain us beneficial in our life.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

264 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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