some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Nowadays, some people argue ,
Use synonyms
life
expectancy of many individuals Add an article
the life
are
higher . So Change the verb form
is
there
retirement Replace the word
their
age
from their job should Use synonyms
also
be increased . According to my opinion , Linking Words
i
think that the people's Change the capitalization
I
age
at which they retire from Use synonyms
work
should not be raised , Use synonyms
i
totally disagree with their argument
Change the capitalization
I
First
and foremost , Linking Words
human
after a certain Fix the agreement mistake
humans
age
should not be able to Use synonyms
work
effectively . To illustrate , when a Use synonyms
person
Use synonyms
get
old , Change the verb form
gets
it's
efficiency to do Correct your spelling
its
job
has been decreased and Correct article usage
a job
younger
population will be more effective in doing that jobs as compare to older ones . Correct article usage
the younger
In addition
, it leads to Linking Words
the
unemployment . Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, even though if the old Linking Words
person
get Use synonyms
retire
from their job , many seats are free for toddlers to join but if they do not retire , youngsters will not be able to get any post .
Add the particle
to retire
However
, nobody can beat the experience of oldsters . Linking Words
Elder
Add an article
An elder
The elder
Use synonyms
person
should have Fix the agreement mistake
people
opportunity
to spend Correct article usage
the opportunity
time
with their family . To demonstrate , Use synonyms
nevertheless
, a Linking Words
person
do Use synonyms
hardwork
in most of their Correct your spelling
hard work
life
and do not Use synonyms
hace
enough Correct your spelling
have
time
to spend with their love ones , they should have right , when they get older Use synonyms
then
they can be at home with family members . Linking Words
Moreover
, they should have a chance to enjoy and collect good Linking Words
wibes
in their Correct your spelling
vibes
wives
wines
life
. As they are totally Use synonyms
induged
in their Correct your spelling
indulged
indulge
work
for whole day and night , they are tensed about their responsibilities , they have Use synonyms
time
to visit their friends and relatives and to be free from all responsibilities and tensions .
In conclusion , Use synonyms
although
oldsters are not able to Linking Words
work
in a perfect way as they did when they were young , they have some Use synonyms
time
in their Use synonyms
life
to spend with their Use synonyms
love
ones . I totally disagree with the people's opinion who thought that the Replace the word
loved
age
of retirement should be increased .Use synonyms
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