some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Nowadays, some people argue ,
life
expectancy of many individuals Add an article
the life
are
higher . So Change the verb form
is
there
retirement Replace the word
their
age
from their job should also
be increased . According to my opinion , i
think that the people's Change the capitalization
I
age
at which they retire from work
should not be raised , i
totally disagree with their argument
Change the capitalization
I
First
and foremost , human
after a certain Fix the agreement mistake
humans
age
should not be able to work
effectively . To illustrate , when a person
get
old , Change the verb form
gets
it's
efficiency to do Correct your spelling
its
job
has been decreased and Correct article usage
a job
younger
population will be more effective in doing that jobs as compare to older ones . Correct article usage
the younger
In addition
, it leads to the
unemployment . Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, even though if the old person
get retire
from their job , many seats are free for toddlers to join but if they do not retire , youngsters will not be able to get any post .
Add the particle
to retire
However
, nobody can beat the experience of oldsters . Elder
Add an article
An elder
The elder
person
should have Fix the agreement mistake
people
opportunity
to spend Correct article usage
the opportunity
time
with their family . To demonstrate , nevertheless
, a person
do hardwork
in most of their Correct your spelling
hard work
life
and do not hace
enough Correct your spelling
have
time
to spend with their love ones , they should have right , when they get older then
they can be at home with family members . Moreover
, they should have a chance to enjoy and collect good wibes
in their Correct your spelling
vibes
wives
wines
life
. As they are totally induged
in their Correct your spelling
indulged
indulge
work
for whole day and night , they are tensed about their responsibilities , they have time
to visit their friends and relatives and to be free from all responsibilities and tensions .
In conclusion , although
oldsters are not able to work
in a perfect way as they did when they were young , they have some time
in their life
to spend with their love
ones . I totally disagree with the people's opinion who thought that the Replace the word
loved
age
of retirement should be increased .Submitted by kiranghuman43 on
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