some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, some people argue ,
life
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expectancy of many individuals
are
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higher . So
there
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their
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retirement
age
from their job should
also
be increased . According to my opinion ,
i
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I
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think that the people's
age
at which they retire from
work
should not be raised ,
i
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I
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totally disagree with their argument
First
and foremost ,
human
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humans
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after a certain
age
should not be able to
work
effectively . To illustrate , when a
person
get
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old ,
it's
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its
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efficiency to do
job
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has been decreased and
younger
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population will be more effective in doing that jobs as compare to older ones .
In addition
, it leads to
the
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unemployment .
For instance
, even though if the old
person
get
retire
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from their job , many seats are free for toddlers to join but if they do not retire , youngsters will not be able to get any post .
However
, nobody can beat the experience of oldsters .
Elder
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person
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people
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should have
opportunity
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to spend
time
with their family . To demonstrate ,
nevertheless
, a
person
do
hardwork
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hard work
in most of their
life
and do not
hace
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have
enough
time
to spend with their love ones , they should have right , when they get older
then
they can be at home with family members .
Moreover
, they should have a chance to enjoy and collect good
wibes
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vibes
wives
wines
in their
life
. As they are totally
induged
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indulged
indulge
in their
work
for whole day and night , they are tensed about their responsibilities , they have
time
to visit their friends and relatives and to be free from all responsibilities and tensions . In conclusion ,
although
oldsters are not able to
work
in a perfect way as they did when they were young , they have some
time
in their
life
to spend with their
love
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ones . I totally disagree with the people's opinion who thought that the
age
of retirement should be increased .
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