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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Nowadays many schools enforce the wearing of
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uniforms
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 amongst their students,
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, there are growing numbers of people who support and who are against the wearing of
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. In
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 essay, we shall go through the pros and cons of having a
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. On one hand, the wearing of a
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 promotes the idea of unity and pride amongst students. One of the major problems that children face in schools is bullying and
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 is usually because of the clothes they wear. With
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 problem is eradicated leaving the kids to concentrate on their studies and achieve the best possible results.
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 help to identify which youngsters belong to which
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, in case they manage to skip a class or even go missing during a
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 trip. An example of
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 would be the schools in Dubai, where each
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 has a separate
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, and no two
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 resemble each other. There help as identity markers of the
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. Alternately, people argue that wearing a
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 restricts a child from freely expressing themselves thereby pigeonholing their creativity and ability to make decisions. In a
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, you will have different children from different backgrounds, both social and economic, and in the case of children who cannot afford a
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, it can give rise to another sort of bullying. In conclusion, the wearing of a
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 or the enforcing of one can have various connotations amongst different people,
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, I feel that the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer pressure
  • bullying
  • socio-economic differences
  • school spirit
  • unity
  • discipline
  • belonging
  • self-expression
  • individuality
  • personal development
  • fashion-related distractions
  • academic performance
  • morning routine
  • comfort
  • financial burden
  • cultural differences
  • diverse backgrounds
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