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In many countries, the traditional customs are being lost. What you think why this happens? What schools and parents need to do to keep the traditional customs alive?

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Folk customs are getting being neglected and starting to decrease by nations.
Parents
 and
education
centres
 can give knowledge about their tradition via stories so that their
children
 and family members and students take
interest
 in it. I will illustrate those possible reasons for it and what elder members of the family and
education
centres
 can do to
children
 take
interest
 in it and start accepting it. By saying strongly, nowadays everyone has their busy schedule with their work, in studies, and
also
 in a different type of social media like Facebook, WhatsApp, Twitter etc. Guardians are
also
 not taking an
interest
 to tell
children
 and their young generation about the history and
culture
 of their religion.
In addition
, many
children
 in
this
 generation do not know about their god and goddess names.
Nevertheless
,
parents
 and
education
centres
 are so busy nowadays that they are not celebrating festivals at their house, schools, universities or institutes so that
children
 get to know about their own nation's
culture
.
For instance
, recently BBC media crew take a random survey to ask questions to the people and
children
 about their
culture
 and tradition and they get 20% of elder people and 85% of
children
 are failed to give answers to their questions. In the past approximately 20 years ago,
parents
 and teachers are celebrating their festivals in a very good manner. They play many competitions between students like quizzes, drama and they
also
 give the opportunity to students to give a performance on their
culture
.
Parents
 and school professors start telling them stories and provide different books to their small ones about their
culture
. In conclusion, it is very difficult to change peoples minds about their knowledge towards their
culture
 and tradition but
education
centres
 and older people of families should start giving time to their small ones about their
culture
 in different ways so that they take
interest
 in it and to
start
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 follow there traditions in the coming future.
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