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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
It is believed by some
people
that's
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 being in your
country
 as travelling or for jobs both
are result
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 in learning the
language
 of the good
country
 by another side it is told that learning a foreign
language
 can be learnt for other reasons.
this
is says
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 discuss
in
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both sides and under
later
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the later
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 side. On the one
hand
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 entering in a foreign
country
 need some circumstances like a degree and the
language
however
 by spreading mechanical
problem
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 in some countries that are formed conditions that
people
 by
attend
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 to a new
country
 and the only way for services is bringing
a
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qualified
language
 skills.
for
example
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 some European countries the
first
 condition that accept
for
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that job seekers is having
boiled
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 decree
more
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 than 5.5. be qualified in a foreign
language
 is the main reason for
work
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my work
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 goal. and the other for other girls
firstly
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for instance
.
secondly
 by progress in science the word made in made into a global village so some
people
 that
work
 as a freelancer must improve their knowledge in other languages.
there for
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therefor
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 studying in a foreign
language
 or beer a freelancer or reasons for
learn
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learning
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 a new
language
. in
conclusion
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 how to be qualified in a foreign
language
 is the main reason for travelling of
work
 goes
people
 learn
language
 due to study in a foreign University of
work
 as a Freelancer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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