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TASK: With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

#world #money #space #exploration #waste
The chart presents the
milimeters
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millimetres
 of height water of how the rainfall has
vary
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 during the
last
 12
months
 in bars, summarizing the
last
 40 years month by month with a line. On the one hand, we can clearly see how the quantity of rain starts to increase during
last
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months
 of the year and becomes lower during the middle
months
.
This
 is a recurrent
behavior
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 of the weather and it has remained stable for the
last
 40 years.
On the other hand
, just
few
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months
 have continued the exact trends amount as March, July, September and November, while the rest of the
months
 have
vary
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 significantly. January, December, April and October presented lower numbers, while May and June have gotten more rain activity than expected. To sum up, even though the 40 years old trend has only converged with 4
months
 of 12, Australia’s rain
stadistics
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statistics
 have not presented big changes.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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