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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is considered that
children
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 should have to learn to distinguish between right and wrong in their childhood. In my opinion,
children
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 have to be to learn the consequence of
punishments
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. And it will help them to develop their lives in order to successful way.
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 with, these days
children
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 behave badly. Because it has caused some bad associations from their schools.
For example
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, today’s teenage boys who are bullying their colanguages that they from low-income families. They
don’t
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 respect others and they only do what they want.
Secondly
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, most of the
children
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 in every family tend to adapt to stealing money from their
parents
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’ pockets. It is constantly happening in
parents
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 who
don’t
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 penalize their
children
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.
Such
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 family’s
children
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don’t
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 know what is the consequence of stealing money from others.
On the other hand
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,
parents
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 should have to penalize their
children
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 for what they did. Only delicate
punishments
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 use to discipline
children
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. At a young age,
children
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 are very rebellious. They
don’t
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 have much knowledge about what they are doing. If
children
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 stealing money from their
parents
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 at that time
parents
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 must have to penalize their
children
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. Thereby they can be understood what they did.
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,
children
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 misbehave in schools at that time teachers should give them
punishments
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,
for instance
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, if a child who treat with violence for someone about skin colour. At that time teachers make sure to teach what is the consequence of violence. Thereby it will be more beneficial for
children
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 in schools. To conclude, I believe that
children
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 who
don’t
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 know what are the rights and wrongs in their early age. As
parents
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 and teachers should have to teach
children
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’s consequences of bad things. And I think only delicate
punishments
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 allow for
children
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disciplinary methods
  • emotional well-being
  • positive reinforcement
  • moral reasoning
  • behavioral issues
  • non-punitive
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • empathy
  • communication
  • physical punishment
  • aggression
  • correctional strategies
  • consistency
  • constructive discipline
  • open discussions
  • moral development
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