Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.others, however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are different arguments with regard to having a fixed for flexible punishments for
offenders
. I agree with those who think the situation of a criminal should be taken into account to impose a right verdict . In the
first
place, there are some who claim to
haved
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have
a fixed punishment to deter from breaking the law. They think that if there were strict penalties for breaklawers, no one would dare to commit a
crime
and
this
way we would have a safer society.
For example
, kidnapping is not right in any condition.For
this
kind of
crime
, there should be an unchangeable verdict to stop these
offenders
.
Additionally
, they think that even for minor
crimes
such
as high-speed driving, there should be a great fine. In
this
way, individuals would obey the driving laws much more, if they had to pay a great
amount
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of fines.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are some situations in which people have to commit a
crime
although
it is not legal. If a person children have a serious disorder
such
as cancer which requires a high amount of money to spend on its treatment,
this
person will be forced to find a way to pay the costs of it. So, it would be possible that those who suffer from the same situation become thieves or burglars.If
instead
of helping them and prepare them
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to jail, they will become even worse when they become free again.
Also
, for
a minor
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minor crimes
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crimes
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there should not be a jail sentence as if minor
offenders
have an experience of encountering other criminals, they will be influenced negatively by them.
Instead
of
this
, governments should consider some rehabilitation courses for them to inform them about the disadvantages of
crimes
. There are indeed some
crimes
that are done for self-defence or unintentional. There are several incidences of
raping
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when victims might kill the rapers. In
this
time, everyone might do the same and
instead
of ,punishments these vulnerable individuals should receive some emotional support from either society and government. In conclusion,
although
there are some who think that there must be unchangeable penalties for each type of
crime
, I think that the condition and desire of
offenders
should be considered
first
before imposing a sentence for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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