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In some countries around the world, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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the growth in technology, education and other sectors, some nations around the world recorded a gradual decrease in the number of
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 and having the
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child
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 between 20-30 aged. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons behind having babies late in
life
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, and how the negatives outweigh the positives.
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life
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 has become increasingly difficult. In the past
life
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 was simple.
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university, you will find a job easily, build a house or rent it
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, you
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 run a family, and feed your
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.
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, the products from supermarkets and pharmacies were
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cheep
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 and easy to get. Meanwhile, requirements of
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life
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 have changed. People
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 doctors, engineers and mechanics cannot find
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 appropriate job easier than past, even if they are smart and capable, because the proportion of individuals rose dramatically.
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, the cost of the goods
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 expensive. A study
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comparing the price of the products in the past and present showed that markets witnessed a double increase.
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, women and men
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 to give birth to
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a child
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child
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children
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.
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, I think giving birth
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 a
child
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 late will cause many problems.
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, if the person
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 married late, he will not have enough time to
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life
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 with his/her children.
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, my aunt got pregnant when she was 40, while her
daughte
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daughter
now
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 complete 5 years old, she is 45 years old. And she is very sad and nervous because she cannot treat her daughter as
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child
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 and cannot play with
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. It
called
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 ( different age problem)
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, being
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pregnant
in
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 late age will lead to medical problems. The
mothers
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 will not be able to take care of
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 children as 20 years pregnant. To summarise, the disadvantages of
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 married late are obvious, so governments should be aware of its effects. They can establish foundations or
chiraties
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charities
 that will assist people who could not have enough money.
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