Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than other experiences we may have in life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

When we are brought to
this
world, we possess
traits
from both parents.The odds turn out to be the
traits
, that are displayed the most in that individual.
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it is very common for the offspring to gain other characteristics as he/she grows up, these characters are merely
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noticeable
.They are gotten from learning and environmental changes
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and always tend to be forgotten or unused.It is of
this
fact, that
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adjudge that
traits
possessed as a
child
is given birth to,
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much more effect on the
child
's development or do they really ?In my opinion, they really do. To start with, the most crucial bit to understand
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is
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the fact that as a
child
develops, he or she possesses characters from either the mother or the father, and these behaviours have a high impact on the
child
,making it almost impossible to forget-they rely mostly on these learnt behaviours, and as
such
, grow with it. Following
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that, behavioural influences
such
as; a
child
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, is one major instance to prove that these
traits
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, sticks to the
child
.
Besides
, even if the
child
were to learn how to write using the right hand, he/she will have a tendency to always rely on using the left ,because he/she is used to it.
Furthermore
,we are humans, and as every human being, we tend to go with that which we were introduced to
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when we were younger.In accordance
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this
, a Muslim will remain a Muslim
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and will continue to live and grow based on the doctrines of a Muslim believer.The same goes with that of a
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Christian
and to other religions.Moreso, a
child
of a serial killer or a
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Jihadist
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how to become something else. In summary, as the adage goes "do not try to be something
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not", summarises everything, and specifically shows that once a trait is acquired,it is that which you grow with.
Therefore
,characters inborn(inbuilt) with a
child
,
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a greater influence than the experiences which that
child
may acquire.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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