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The users of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, vertical medium
such
 as Instagram, Pinterest, and Facebook has become common mean to relate others
instead
 of in-person relationship. Massaging through these applications and websites is not entirely beneficial, though its benefits should
also
 be noticed. Many beneficial outcomes have been brought to human life that covers detriments. There are numerous individuals from various countries, races, religions, and even gender;
hence
,
people
 can get familiar with the international world. Though previous decades educated
people
 could find a pen pal to know foreigners, now about all
people
, have access to the outer world. Not only might extroverted ones enjoy online massaging apps, but it is
also
 enjoyable for introverted
people
. Introverted that cannot make communication in person could start a conversation through virtual world smoothly and quickly. These are only some of the merits related to social media’s bright side. What is its dark side? Albeit virtual relations are not utterly dependable because
people
 start their relationship online and before that they usually have not known each other’s, so they procrastinate to assure about each other’s well.
As a result
, online fraud would be bothered them. Having said that, many
people
 tend to spend too much time online messaging without considering that account’s authenticity.
Besides
, spending much more time texting through social media is another drawback of
this
 replacement. When
people
 aim to visit each other face-to-face, they will face time limitations;
however
, for texting, they are available 24/7.
Furthermore
, more demerits could be mentioned. By way of conclusion,
although
 there are many negative features, the positivity of utilizing
this
 way of communication should be considered. If human beings apply an appropriate approach and manage its usage,
this
 means of communication indeed become pure benefits for all
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced connectivity
  • geographical barriers
  • maintaining relationships
  • valuable tool
  • staying informed
  • global issues
  • current events
  • niche topics
  • professional networking
  • career growth
  • business opportunities
  • mental health challenges
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • feelings of loneliness
  • over-reliance
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • privacy concerns
  • data security
  • personal information
  • accessed and misused
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