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Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Globalization
 is a common trend in
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 century, which is creating
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positive
 changes in economic growth,
by
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this
 benefits some people believe that it will cause some negative points like fading cultural identity. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss the effect of
globalization
 from some conceivable angles. In
term
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 of
advantages
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 of
globalization
, there is no denying that
,
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 economic growth is
inexorable
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 part of global linkage by helping to merge large companies from all around the world.
Moreover
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 multiculturalism is caused as
result
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a result
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 of
globalization
.
For instance
, by rising connections between various societies, the possibility of exchange in traditions dramatically increased and caused some ethnic groups have
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 known. One of the apparent
exaple
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example
 of
this
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these
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 relations is the vanishing of old-fashion
sterotypes
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stereotypes
 in Asian countries.
On the other hand
, with
respectto
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respect to
 drawbacks, the effect of
globalization
 in local communities should be taken into consideration. By improvement of
multinational
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a multinational
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organization
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organizations
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 like; cheap restaurant chains and fast food outlets, people have more tendency to buy foods from
this
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 popular chains rather than local shops.
This
 matter will have
substantional
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substantial
influnence
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influence
 on
disappearing
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the disappearing
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 of local
indutries
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industries
.
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 the ethnic groups are being frightened of vanishing their traditional identity. After
all
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 thing was considered,
overll
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overall
,
globalization
 is so commonplace in
this
 day and age. It will affect the economies in
positive
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a positive
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 way by increasing
combination
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the combination
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 of
diffrent
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different
 firms and joint ventures.
however
in
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it
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 could have
influnce
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influence
influenced
 on
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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 of local industries. I can strongly opine
opine
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that the merit of
globalization
outweigh
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 the
disadvanteges
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disadvantages
. more interesting and multicultural
atmoshere
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atmosphere
 is being created as
result
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a result
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 of it.
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