Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Globalization

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is a common trend in

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century, which is creating

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positive

changes in economic growth,

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benefits some people believe that it will cause some negative points like fading cultural identity. In

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we will discuss the effect of

globalization

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from some conceivable angles. In

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advantages

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the advantages

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globalization

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, there is no denying that

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economic growth is

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part of global linkage by helping to merge large companies from all around the world.

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Moreover

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multiculturalism is caused as

result

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globalization

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, by rising connections between various societies, the possibility of exchange in traditions dramatically increased and caused some ethnic groups have

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known. One of the apparent

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relations is the vanishing of old-fashion

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stereotypes

in Asian countries.

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, with

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drawbacks, the effect of

globalization

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in local communities should be taken into consideration. By improvement of

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a multinational

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organization

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organizations

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like; cheap restaurant chains and fast food outlets, people have more tendency to buy foods from

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this

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popular chains rather than local shops.

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matter will have

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substantial

influnence

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influence

disappearing

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the disappearing

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of local

indutries

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industries

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the ethnic groups are being frightened of vanishing their traditional identity. After

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thing was considered,

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overall

globalization

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is so commonplace in

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day and age. It will affect the economies in

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a positive

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way by increasing

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diffrent

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different

firms and joint ventures.

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could have

influnce

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influence

influenced

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the disappearing

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disappearing

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of local industries. I can strongly opine

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that the merit of

globalization

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outweigh

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the

disadvanteges

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disadvantages

. more interesting and multicultural

atmoshere

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atmosphere

is being created as

result

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a result

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of it.

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Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

Some students do not have the natural ability for other languages. Some people think that schools should not force students to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? 1)Tiredness 2)Dark circles

In some cultures,children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough

Due to high unemployment rate in some countries, pupils should be offered only primary education and not secondary education since there are no jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that what children is their behaviour. other leave the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.