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Band 8.5

You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: describe the piece of equipment you have seen why having the same equipment would be useful for your company offer your assistance in buying the equipment Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 mail to inform you that I attended the business meeting
last
 Monday where I came to know about different equipment which is used in the manufacturing process. I show mostly all types of tools and machinery that can be useful in our factory, but from all of them, I found the forklift machine very interesting as it runs fast in comparison to manual handover. Because of the advanced forklift, our company's production line can be operated effectively and without any delay in moving pallets from one place to another.
Moreover
, It is a one-time investment and
then
 only maintenance will be required which is free for the first three years. I have got their contact details in case we need
this
 newly automated machine, so we can contact them and arrange an appointment to see
this
 machine. Please reply to me with your interest, so we can take
further
 steps. Your Faithfully, Ankit Patel
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coherence and cohesion
For better coherence, ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and consider adding supporting details or examples where needed.
task achievement
Check for minor grammatical errors and sentence structures to enhance clarity and professionalism.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and polite opening and closing, which is essential for formal correspondence.
complete response
The response adequately addresses the task requirements by describing the equipment, its benefits, and offering assistance.
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