Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

some people think that attending
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school
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effective than
joinging
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joining
online
classes
at home. In my view,
this
statement is not completely correct since there are many benefits of both kinds of
classes
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I will explain more detail and give some
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expeirences
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experiences
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paragraph
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To begin
with, there are several benefits of studying face to face at
school
for
children
.
Firstly
, it
help
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children
have more interaction with
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the teacher
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when they are not understanding
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in
lesson
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.
This
is because they lack
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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and like
the
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exploring. As
kindergradent
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kindergarten
to high
school
, the
school
time
not only used to learn
biogy
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biology
or math but
also
socialize with other students
then
develop communication abilities.
That is
the moment for kids to adapt and absorb information or
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new things slowly.
Secondly
, kids are innocent and easy to distract by outside
activites
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activities
which means they like playing than studying.
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, they need to go
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where have
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attention from teachers.
On the other hand
, taking the online class might bring some advantages for adults , particularly those
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time
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or unable to attend a
classrom
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classroom
.
Firsly
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Firstly
First
, online
class
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offer
a flexible schedules
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flexible schedules
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for adult learners. Some degree programs offer 24/7 learning materials, email to instructors and online tutors, so on to ensure people can learn whatever they have
time
.
Secondly
, accessing online learning have
affortable
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affordable
prices. If the traditional campus programs go with vast of student's
addtional
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additional
fees from textbook, living or transportation, the online lectures help learners reduce a part of
fiancial
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financial
expenses.
Instead
of paying extra money for
children
care, some people can stay at home to study and take care
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families.
For example
, a student study at college cost $8000 for
tution
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tuition
fees and $ 1000 for travel and daily expense per year. They can join the online
classes
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$ 2000 and have
time
to work and take care
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. In conclusion, both
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of class is important in our life and should be
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at some points.
Children
highly encourage to study at
school
with the supervision from
teacher
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a teacher
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, and adults want to have a freedom
schedules
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for studying, the online
classes
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