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Some parents think that helping their children with homework is a good idea others believe that children should do their homework on their own discuss both views and give your opinion

#parents #children #homework #idea
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A highly controversial issue relates today to whether
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parents collaborate in their juvenile
school
 activities or not. In my opinion,
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 can be
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positive thinking to support children after
school
however
 children should be
self sufficient
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 to work on their own.The subsequent essay state points to support my view. On one hand in the present era, youngsters are overloaded with
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 technical educational
system
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systems
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such
 as coding
softwares
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software
 which are making their lives easy and productive.The University of Stanford,
for
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 states that
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brain
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 of teenagers can be ten times more active and accurate as compared to adults .
Additionally
,they can be best in completing their job according to their best standards.
Therefore
, coworking with parents might be
time
 consuming and unproductive .
However
,
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 there are several reasons why parents should be acting like coworkers after
school
.
For instance
,
this
 teamwork can
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time
 for their youngsters and
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 them in their projects give them the opportunity to build companionship with their adults.
As a result
 hos opportunity give them
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privilege
 to enjoy spare
time
 and develop new skills . In conclusion,I believe that both
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arguments have their merits.On balance, I feel that children should be capable of doing their own tasks which in return make them self sufficient .
This
 is because they are so smart and proactive that they can manage their
school
 projects and learn how to manage
time
 in their lives .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • collaborative learning
  • academic progress
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • critical thinking
  • facilitators
  • moderation
  • enhancing understanding
  • sense of accomplishment
  • independent learning
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