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The death penalty is best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

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Capital
punishment
 is adopted by America and many other countries in the East as they feel it is the best way to curtail crime.
However
, I partially agree with
this
 notion, and I will substantiate my reasoning in the course of
this
 essay. The
death
 penalty is usually awarded for the most heinous of crimes committed,
however
, I feel it is more of an easy release. The reason I feel
this
 is because when the perpetrator is committing the act, they are not allowing the victim any relief,
instead
 they are amounting maximum violence on them before releasing them.
Therefore
, I feel in
such
 circumstances, consecutive life sentences are best applicable
This
 is because they do not allow the person to escape and they will be locked away with only their thoughts for company, which I feel is more painful than instant
death
.
For example
, Peter Scully is one of Australia's worst paedophiles who was caught in the Philippines, for the trafficking and rapes of young girls which led to one child's
death
. He was given life in jail in the Philippines with no chance of parole or even extradition to Australia.
On the other hand
, many countries
such
 as Singapore, Malaysia, Taiwan, and even Thailand are part of 54 nations that impose the
death
 penalty for drug smuggling. I feel, in
this
 case, that capital
punishment
 is apt because it will hopefully deter others from following
this
 same path. In conclusion, whilst I feel capital
punishment
 is required, I believe the decision of
punishment
 must fit the crime.
Therefore
, it is the ministry’s responsibility to decide what will be the best
punishment
. All in all, I feel that both capital and consecutive life sentences act as effective punishments when trying to deter criminals.
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