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Today, TV channels show more men’s sports than women’s sports. Why is this the case? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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These days, there is a significant difference between
men
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women
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’s
sports
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coverage
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 on TV. I believe that
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women
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’s sport should get just as much
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 as
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’s, and will outline my reasons in the following essay.
To begin
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 with, there are many reasons for the dominance of
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 athletics programs on television(1). Due to a large proportion of
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 viewers being male, television channels tend to broadcast
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's
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 programs to maximize their ratings and profits. Take football as an example. Inside a coffee shop, it is common to see a group of young
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 discussing a recent
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’s football match, while
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 show a greater preference for(2) discussing other topics like shopping or celebrity gossip.
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, because
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 are usually physically stronger and faster than
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, they tend to play at a much higher level(3) , which makes
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’s
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 much more exciting to watch.
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, I am of the opinion that it is necessary for audio channels to provide equal
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coverage
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 for both genders(4) .
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, it helps to create gender equality in society(5) and increases the participation rate of
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 in sport. Every time
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 go out onto the field, they give it their all knowing that their best will likely go unnoticed, and
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 just like
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, female athletes should receive full recognition(6) for their effort.
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, better media
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also
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 enables
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 to make money from endorsements(7) which improve their income.
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 to say, more television exposure for female players will lead to major deals with endorsers and higher salaries in the future through advertising contracts. In conclusion, why
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women
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’s
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 shows do not receive enough
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 in
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 day and age results from the aforementioned reasons, and I truly believe that it is necessary to ensure equal
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 of
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women
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’s
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.
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