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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand our attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention
It has been over a decade since the two humans had stepped down to the moon and after
that is
 the history of
space
 industries.
Space
missions
has
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 become one of the important things that shall be done for
a
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 progress of
the
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humanity.
However
, it is undeniable that in the present day, there
also
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 have
problems
 that need to be fixed in the world but the
space
 mission still
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 to be one of the things that we cannot take
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 eyes off.
To begin
 with, I disagree with the statement above due to the following reason.
Firstly
, the
space
missions
 already have been planned for years, and if the plan has been cancelled, it will cause many
problems
 in the industry by having
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late progress and all the schedules will delay.
Secondly
, the
space
 industries already have an investment in the project that cannot be ignored ,
otherwise
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 it will be a waste of money.
Lastly
,
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space
missions
is
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 very important for humans in the future more than solving
problems
in
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 the
earth
. Perhaps the best example is if there are serious
problems
in
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 the
earth
 that will make
human
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humans
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 cannot live
in
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 the
earth
, we can just move out to
others
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 planets that have been explored before.
Moreover
, I do believe that we can separate the organization to take control
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missions
 and the
problems
. So, it
not
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 necessary to let anything between the
missions
 and the
problems
. In summary, I cannot entirely agree with the statement due to the reasons and examples in the former and latter
paragraph
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. But I do believe that we still need to tackle the
problems
in
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 the
earth
 for a longer lifetime
in
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this
 planet.
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