3 Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is commonly believed that
advers
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adverse
advisers
play a vital role in the sales rate. While from the psychological perspective, people
shuld
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should
buy products that they need, I
compeletely
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completely
agree with
this
given statement that advertising has the strong effect on company's sales.  On the one hand, buying
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is
the
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undeniable part of our
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lives
life
lifes
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. We have spent our time and budget
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purchasing things. From
psychological
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standpoint
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stand point
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, humans have to buy
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goods
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goos
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goods
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which they need. It is effective to have a list which classified materials and their priority, In
this
way, we avoid
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any commercial and it is likely that after
few
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months, we will have
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amount of money in our bank account. Maybe we will have a small journey with our family.
Furthermore
, it is important to get away from any advertisement which might be impossible.
On the other hand
, In the competitive world, it is necessary for all companies to use
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amount of their money for making a tantalizing advert.
Firstly
, if the commerce
catch
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the whole attention of customers, the sales rate of that specific product will raise substantially.
For instance
, in 2000, Apple company was sold more than 2000
iphones
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iPhones
phones
in one week.
This
company used new methods in their advert and louched it on the
Instegram
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Instagram
which people spent more than 3 hours in a day in
this
application. Nowadays Apple is the leather of
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market.
Secondly
, with advertisements companies would be able to explain their new product, briefly, sometimes humans do not have any information about new products,
thus
, advertisements is the best way for it.
Finally
,
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market is the best opportunity for companies, because they
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by adverts and they can force their parents to buy whatever they see in commercial breaks. To conclude,
although
we have to think about our budget, I strongly agree that adverts
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the key factor in our decisions
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buying new
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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