Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extend do you agree?

People
have always tried to improve themselves by following the actions of somebody they admire, depending on the aspirations
each
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have. Nowadays, Internet has made
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that any person can make their daily routines public, and for famous
people
to show how they live and interact outside scenery.
This
is not exactly positive for
kids
that are just starting to learn about
life
and how to organize their time.
To begin
with, watching the daily actions of celebrities can make
people
believe that
this
is how everybody should be living, spending money and buying expensive products.
Kids
will easily believe that whatever the person they admire does, is what they should be doing as well, requesting for purchasing articles to their parents that they probably will not need and will become a useless expend.
Similarly
, popular
people
usually intend to achieve what they consider
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standard of beauty and make it look like appearance is the only important thing in
life
. For
kids
that are only starting to learn what to believe or not, is not good to see how some persons recognize somebody's value because of his or her looks.
In addition
, to see the
people
they admire doing activities they like might make youngers
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care more about following another's
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lives
life
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lifes
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on screen
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than living a
life
on their own. Staying connected to
electronical
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electronic
devices can make everybody
to
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lose the track of time and waste it
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the day for being
on
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ward
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of another person's activities. Infants are in an age of learning and expanding their knowledge and the best way to teach something is by showing examples. To aim
a
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life
that does not correspond to us can be harmful
for
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adults and even more for
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children
childrens
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children
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. Luxury and beauty standards are topics that only an adult can decide
wheter
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whether
to follow or not and they should not be exposed to
kids
without an adult's guidance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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