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Advertising discouraged people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same.agree or disagree

#people #individuals #want
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We see a lot of
advertisements
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 in our daily life, be it on transportation or on different media. We get to know about the products that are available in the market through them, and they give the individuals with different taste options to choose from. Advertising
give
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gives
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 us information and allow us to choose from different options
avaialble
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available
for
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 us. Through
advertisements
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, we usually find out about a new
product
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 or service which might fit our needs. We can
then
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 compare the different varieties and select the service or
product
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 that would best suit us. Without
advertisements
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, the information source is very limited.
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, various
advertisements
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 give us a chance to express ourselves. The same advertisement could make people think differently, as nobody is ever the same. If we do not like the
product
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that is
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 being advertised, we likely will not buy it, no matter how persuasive the advertisement is.
This
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 is the key reason that different brands and similar products of the same type exists. We choose what we need or want, based on our own criteria, and not based on how
this
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product
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 is advertised.
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,
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has
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 no impact
in
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on
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 our decision making. To conclude,
advertisements
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 make people know that there are different things available for them, and people choose what works for them depending on their own criteria. As
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, in my opinion,
advertisements
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 give us options and allow us to be different from others.
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