Blood sports (any spots involving Killing or shedding of blood as bullfighting, cockfighting or hunting)have become hot topic for debate in recent years as society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed.blood sports should be banned. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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animals are becoming more and more important in our society,

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to harming any living being are disappearing. From my point of view, hurting cannot be called a sport, nor an entertainment. Is it true that activities like hunting have been, and actually are, for some people their way of living as they live in certain areas where food is not as accessible as in the most populated areas

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Even

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could be a strong argument, it cannot be an excuse not to take action against animal cruelty. Pursuing wildlife with the only purpose of having fun

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killing an animal is sadistic and uncivilized. When is hunting season many innocent lives are being taken, like baby mammals which are not permitted to kill. Another point worth noting is that some of these animals sometimes are hurt and left agonizing until they die, which is a sad way to end their lives.

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could be considered a biodiversity threat.

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used to defend these horrific acts called sports is that these are traditions. In some places like Spain, bullfighting is extremely normal, these acts are taking place almost every day. Some of them may not involve killing the animal but it does not mean that they do not suffer.

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, children are

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extreme violence, which could, eventually, leave them with mental issues. In conclusion,

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animals should be kept by tradition, the vast majority of human beings agree that participating in blood sports is crucial for a healthy society. I strongly believe that banning these events could bring about a major change in our relationship with nature.

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