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Countries becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The rise of globalisation has given rise access to
people
 to connect with the world and share goods
which
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 are local to
people
. I believe
this
 is a positive development. Nowadays, due to sake of work,
people
 compelled to live in other
countries
, which make them miss their home food, goods they endear, can have in other nation as well.
For instance
, Indian
people
linving
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living
 in
United
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the United
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 States
an
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and
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 enjoy Indian food whenever they want.
Moreover
,
this
also
 gives
them
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the
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feeling
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the feeling
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, that somehow they are attached to their homeland.
Furthermore
, it
also
 allows
people
 of
other land
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another land
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 to enjoy which are famous in other
nation
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nations
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.
For example
, African coffee
supplied
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 worldwide these days.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue
fhat
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that
 there is no uniqueness left.
In addition
 to that
people
 are losing interest in travelling to other
countries
, which eventually effecting the
countries
 and overall economy of
country
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the country
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. In
conclusion
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 I believe that growing similarities between
countries
 is beneficial
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for
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fir
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for
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 development.
People
 can take advantage of
good
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goods
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 from other
countries
, as well as immigrants can be less stressed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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