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Some people believe that we have too many choices these days. To what extent to you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
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The revolutionary advancement in modern technology has endowed
people
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 with substantial resources for their survival in the best possible way.
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, there are sections of society that cannot afford even basic necessities. For them these
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 are out of reach,
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 I partially agree with the view. In the present era, human beings have exponentially increased the number of options to avail in different fields like
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, transport and business due to many reasons.
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, the creative methods to produce a variety of
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 and its preservation have benefitted the human population with significant types of edibles during the entire year.
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, non-seasonals can be bought from the
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 market irrespective of the weather conditions due to modernized preservation methods.
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, while travelling, we can opt for many
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, according to affordability and convenience, due to inventions of faster ways of transportation leading to a revolution in transport hubs.
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, the advancement in education and development has endowed
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 with the availability of an enormous number of professional fields to succeed in their lives. There are,
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, unequal distribution of positive aspects of technology. Many underdeveloped countries are lacking the basic necessities to survive like
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, health and financial resources.
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 of having
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, they do not have an option to avail the of fundamental human rights. To illustrate, the research data by WHO shows that 45% of the population does not have access to
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 water supply; 35% of
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 are spending a substandard life.
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, certain job and study courses are limited to developed countries only, leaving others devoid of these advantages. In the light of the above arguments, I believe that
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 have access to many
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 to enjoy in their lives but there is an unequal distribution of beneficial resources. Everyone should have an equal approach to all types of advantageous impacts of modern technology, and foremost, there should be the provision of at least fundamental human rights.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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