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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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As the world evolves, and
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 of life improved with an increase in population numbers, some problems started to stem. And the scarcity of
food
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 major issues. I partially agree with the group
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 that the solution is in
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genetically modified
food
.
Firstly
, we have to admit that
this
 idea can contribute
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problem solving, but it is by no mean the most right way. By using
this
 process we could help in increasing the quantity of
food
 served in different parts of the world. Meaning that
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 type of
food
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 our supermarket shelves. making it easier for us to find it.
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 it could be synthesised and  modified to provide us with vitamins and minerals we could not find
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regular
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foot
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.
On the other hand
, there are many drawbacks
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this
 process. Perhaps the
first
 and main one is that many people do not trust
this
 whole industry. Many people all over the world refused to buy or eat
this
 kind of kosher. Added to
this
 the manufacturing  problem with a lot of sources needed. Which in turn do not contribute well in tackling the main problem as the places suffering from starvation are the same
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which
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 would have
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few or no sources and can not afford to produce or fund these factories. To sum up, while making industrial
food
 have some benefits, there are some issues and problems connected with it.
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