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Some people believe that tourism promotes the economy while other argue that tourism destroy the environment. Discuss both views.

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Travelling and
tourism
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 in general, are of the most important impacts of the newly-globalized world. some say
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 can lead to the economic growth of the targeted region while others argue that its damage to nature is more vital. there are some points in both views which will be discussed in the following text. On the
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 hand, the
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industry
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 is considered to be
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 of the most profitable industries in the world.
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 led to economic growth in many countries including Iran and India. From another ,perspective
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 can provide a better more economically just world. Meaning that by bringing money and budget to the historical areas, that are mostly poorer in sense of economy and facilities, society can experience less economic inequality as locals can gain profit from
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industry
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, in Esfahak which is
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 of the abandoned villages of Iran, we could see major economic growth as the villagers decided to rehabilitate the village make some
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ecologies
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 to host international tourists.
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, there is a growing concern among environmentalists regarding the consequences of
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 on the environment.
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, as
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 grows there are more pollution and damage which happens due to the over-use of land or simply irresponsible tourists who do not care about their footprint on the places they visit .To make it more tangible, we can talk about Abasabad jungles located in the north of Iran which is suffering from deforestation because of the overflowing tourists visiting there during summer. All in all, the
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industry
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 which is
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 of the outcomes of modern globalized life has many merits and demerits and environmental and economic issues are two of the most important outcomes of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • generate income
  • local economy
  • development
  • infrastructures
  • quality of life
  • cultural heritage
  • authentic experiences
  • detrimental effects
  • pollution
  • natural habitats
  • depletion
  • natural resources
  • overcrowding
  • carbon footprint
  • global climate change
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental impacts
  • conservation
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