The internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades.Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. what are your opinions on this?

The
internet
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development changed our lifestyle sharply by a variety of merits,
however
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it has some negative aspects. On one hand,The
internet
increment
transferred
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our social relationships and our lifetime negatively.
Firstly
,our relationship and Family gatherings are declined by the
internet
gadgets
such
as WhatsUp. Many communities are willing to connect to their relatives as
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rather
to
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the
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real family gathering.
Secondly
, Many young nations spend a lot of time surfing the net each day.
therefore
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,many
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the young public
is
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addicted to the
internet
and social networks.
On the other hand
,
internet
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the internet
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cause change our lifestyle by altering work performance, connection, and information.In terms of work performance, The
internet
increase
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the performance and speed of
works
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work
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on the earth.
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, Many careers and jobs
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are creat
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creat
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created
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base
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on social networks and need fewer facilities than in the past.
Moreover
,The
internet
causes
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us to access easily
to
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information from each corner of the world.
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, the poverty people in
the
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undeveloped
counties
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countries
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can use the
internet
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for
researching
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and data-gathering.
overall
, The
Internet
has many benefits in our life. I think it changed our
life
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lives
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faster and better than in the past.
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