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Some people think that the computers will be more intelligent than humans. Others are worried about the negative consequences of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether to live and study abroad or it is better to stay in our
country
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? The question can be answered with very different opinions
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 because everyone has a different perspective. If we are talking about education some
people
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 can decide that their future has more realization in some other
country
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. But if we are talking about living,
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 is a personal decision. In my
opinion
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 living in
other
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another country
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country
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 can be very helpful to improve the level of the language
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country
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. When we take the decision to move away, we have to think about the
people
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 we are leaving. It’s hard to do that because you leave your home and the
people
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 who you truly love. But
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 can give you
a very good opportunities
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: You can meet new
people
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, you will travel and see so many new things that some
people
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 believe
for
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, you can find a new thing that will inspire you and will arouse new interest in you. If had the opportunity
of
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 leaving in some other
country
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 I will definitely think a lot about it, but I won’t miss the chance. If we are talking about
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education, I think
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 is a good way to organize better chances for your future. There are many professions which are more developed in some countries.
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 the Its jobs are a way more get on well in Germany, The Netherlands and so on than here in our lovely little
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 Bulgaria. For my future
for now
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 I choose to study marketing
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 because I think that
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 job will
suits
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 me and I will work it with pleasure. In my opinion
for now
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its
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 not so important where you will study about
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. I think that it’s more about the place and the
people
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 you’re working with. If you love to travel and experiment with yourself
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 is your chance, and you don’t have to miss it. But if you
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 unsure about something connected with
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travel or
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studying out of your habitat you think carefully.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • machine learning
  • superintelligent computers
  • algorithms
  • process data
  • ethical dilemmas
  • job displacement
  • surveillance
  • cyber-attacks
  • privacy and security
  • recognize patterns
  • strategic games
  • dependence
  • individual freedoms
  • proponents
  • outperform
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