In some countries celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as a part of their fame.do you agree or disagree?

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celebrities
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, their life is an open book to the public,
therefore
it is common that most of them do not have privacy at all. How it affects
them
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on
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how they live? In
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why I agree that
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people cannot live freely.
To begin
with,
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celebrities are role models that people are idolizing and
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them. Some of them are acting what the community want to see. They need to be pretty, well mannered and glamorous for them to be loved and accepted. Nowadays, because of social media people are easy
to
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access them,
thus
they can follow them and some can be connected to them.
In addition
, it is true that anyone can publicise them with a photo or video that can be taken on their mobile phones. By that, they can post it without the permission of that individual,
thus
invading their privacy.
Furthermore
, some individuals are making
this
for
living
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,
such
as, they are selling pictures and videos to the publishers, they are
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calling
them
papparazzis
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paparazzi
. They are famous and popular because they are making the news about them whether it is good or bad. But some of them are trying to ignore and live their lives,
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there are still victims of being published. It causes depression, stress and even danger not only in their lives but
also
to their families. In conclusion, being popular can be beneficial but it is more
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