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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?

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Since cities and towns had started to grow, accommodation was a severe role in human life. While people in many countries consider renting as a much reasonable option, others claim that they prefer to buy an apartment regardless of any obstacles. In
this
 essay, I will examine the reasons for
this
 phenomenon along with my personal opinion about the correctness of
this
 matter. People who tend to buy a home usually have two major arguments.
Firstly
, they argue that buying an apartment or a house is some kind of investment for their future.
This
 statement can be seen especially in undeveloped or developing nations, so crowds try to somehow rescue their money and their saving from economical threats.
Moreover
, we are witnessing
this
 attitude in traditional societies like Iran. In these countries, having accommodation for your own will demonstrate your wealth and power so you can introduce yourself in the community as an independent member.
Thus
, with a closer observation, we can see
this
 way of thinking comes from a poor economy and obsolete attitudes Now we can ask
this
 question about our subject
that is
 it beneficial to pursue
this
 method in our life? According to the researches, if you are living in a country that you can be sure about having a job or government support, it is better to consider renting as your primary choice, especially if you are young.
Otherwise
, if the unemployment rate in your society is high and you have money to get a proper apartment, you should buy one in favour of at least being sure about your home in case of unemployment.
Hence
, the correctness of
this
 decision is dependent on your location and your country’s economic level. All in all, while uncountable people living in renting places, there are a group who prefer to have their own accommodation. In my view, it is not a phenomenon that can be judged easily and has a direct connection with your location and situation. But obviously, it is not bad at all to buy a private home if you can afford it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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