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Some people say govement should give health care the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spent the taxpayer’s money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views with regard to the question of how government should prioritize
budget
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 to various social issues. In my point of view, both medical
care
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 and other industry
such
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education
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 can be distributed adequate
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financial
resource
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 to implement a better life
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fo
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for
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 human
being
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beings
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 in any country. It is clear that healthiness
have
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 gotten the top priority in expenditure
recent
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 years all over the world. Providing
sufficent
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sufficient
 health
care
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 can build a fundamental condition to create
happy
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 and strong society. National
budget
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 are used in suppling medicine, treatment or
reserching
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researching
 new
vacccine
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vaccine
vaccines
,
new
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 therapy to cure irremediable disease for patients. Covid-19 pandemic shows us a
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crystal
 clear reality that well-being is the most lasting important consideration, without it, there are
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 people or economy could operate as they are supposed or planned to do.
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, according to other
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perspectives
, taxpayer’s
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 rather
allocate
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 into other more
crutial
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crucial
critical
 fields than health
care
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. Take
education
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 as an example. Investing in
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 system to universalize widely
education
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 or provide advanced learning method to every area in a country often spend
alot
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a lot
 of
money
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.
Education
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’s role in making
a
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competence
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 and
competive
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competitive
 workforce is undeniable.
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, a country with
skillfull
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skilful
skillfully
 employees can become
a
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appelling
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appealing
appalling
 destination for
forein
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foreign
 investor and
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therefore
 improve
prospety
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prosperity
property
 itself. In conclusion, while the benefit of pouring
money
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 into health
care
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, allow people to have a better
phisical
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physical
 condition, some still think that other essential issues should be taken considerable privilege, like
education
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. I believe there are much more one industries which need
money
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 to work well to profit society and
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policymaker
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 have to
thoughfully
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thoughtfully
 choose which one should be prioritized in each period of time or national developing purpose.
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