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Some people believe that it is a good idea for older people to work if it is possible for them to do so. Do you agree or disagree?

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Retirement
age
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 is now becoming one of the most argumentative issues. It is argued by many that the elderly should be allowed to
work
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 if they are able to do so. From my perspective, I agree with
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 school of thought because of the necessity of money in our daily lives. On the one hand, allowing older people to
work
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 at any
age
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 they want is disadvantageous since senior workers may be predisposed to certain health issues which may adversely affect their productivity and their
work
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 effectiveness.
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 is because diseases tend to make them not as active and strong as the young who are more creative and energetic.
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, old builders suffering from acute pain are likely to struggle to carry a large number of heavy things
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 as bricks simultaneously.
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, they cannot complete their assignments on time and achieve targeted e
mployer’s
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demands.
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, I think that the elderly should have no retirement
age
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 as
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 trend will provide t
hem
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extra income to cover their living expenses. To be specific, there are a lot of people who do not have p
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a pension
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ension
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pensions
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or social subsidies finding it impossible to live without working. They have many difficulties in paying for their daily needs,
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 as food or m
edical
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a medical
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examination.
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, if they can do suitable jobs which are not physically demanding and stressful, they can not only make a living but
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 combat boredom. In conclusion,
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 older workers might be less productive and effective because of their health issues, it is my firm conviction that they should be allowed to
work
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 at any
age
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 they want to earn their own money and derive pleasure from working.

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