Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, it has been increasingly common to see that one of the most problematic issues facing human
being
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is the negative impacts on the environment. Whether
what
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the main problem
is remains
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controversial as some people believe that the principal issue is the
loss
of specific
species
in flora and fauna while others think there more far more important problems. The following paragraphs will discuss both the views and present reasons for my opinion. On the one hand, it is believed that the main environmental issue of our time is the
loss
of particular
species
due to the
loss
of their habitats or extreme living conditions. To be more specific, not every animal is able to live in
such
a volatile environment or stay in a habitat
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does not belong to it.
This
, in turn, may weaken their body, especially the immune system and cardiovascular system that
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to the extinction of some special
species
. A penguin,
for instance
, can only live in low-temperature
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and if it is placed
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a hotter environment, the body might not
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properly.
On the other hand
, the
loss
of
species
may not be as serious as the others,
for example
, global warming or
greenhouse
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effect. Global warming, specifically, has a direct influence on human
being
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while the lack of certain animals and plants might not. Because of
this
, the extinction of specific
species
may not
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as
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the main environmental problem of our time. To sum up, I firmly believe that the
loss
of particular plants and animals is not the most serious problem facing our world nowadays. Caution,
nevertheless
, must be seriously taken to solve all the environmental problems in order that we can live in a safe world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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