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Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

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When walking along the streets especially crowded-
peoplepeople
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people people
 places, most
people
 were asked at least once by
beggars
 to give them some cash. There is a controversial discussion about
this
 situation that providing
money
 to
beggars
 is appropriate or not. Partly of the population refute doing
such
 an action, while others consider that it is a good thing to do. In my opinion, I believe that
people
 should not grant their
money
 to the beggar and I will explain the reasons in the essay below.
To begin
 with, in long term, bestowing
money
 to
beggars
 causes a negative consequence afterwards because
people
 may indirectly increase the number of baggers in the future. To illustrate, if there are abundant pedestrians donating
money
 to the
beggars
, the total amount of
money
 is high
although
 the value of each person granting to them seem slightly.
This
 behaviour will encourage the vagrants or homeless
people
 who have no work and income to become another beggar since they can receive earnings from the donators.
Furthermore
, when considering the reason, most citizens because of having sympathy toward another human;
however
, human trafficking operations may use
this
 method to gain benefit.
For instance
, among the real
beggars
, there are some groups of
people
 that may be kidnapped and forced to be
beggars
 and givers cannot distinguish whether it is a criminal or not. That means the citizens giving cash to them unintentionally give aid to the wrong-doing. To conclude, I conceive that donating
money
 to
beggars
 is not suitable because it conduces to unfavourable aftermaths more than benefits
such
 as the increased quantity of
beggars
 and criminality.
Instead
,
beggars
 should not exist in society in order to avoid these results.
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