The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

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in obesity is an alarming issue as it has adverse effects on
health
and fitness and it is putting
people
at risk of chronic diseases. While
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the
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sedentary lifestyles
as well as easy access to
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food
are the prominent reasons behind it, there are certain measures that can address
this
problem to some extent. The
first
and the foremost cause is sitting and
one
place for hours together.
This
is because those
people
who either are working at the office or from home have to sit at
one
place and do their work which drains them out and so they are discouraged to do any physical activity.
This
inevitable lifestyle is giving them exertion but not exercise
thus
making them overweight and keeping them at higher risk of having
health
issues.
Secondly
, the availability of
food
is so easy that anyone can satisfy their cravings at any moment as everything is
one
click away. Even if it is a sort of paradise to
people
who are already stressed, the ordered
food
mostly has preservatives and is high in calories which can again hamper their
health
. Especially in the recent pandemic where
people
were not allowed to go anywhere, it was seen that
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online services had flourished. Despite the reasons observed in the current
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I think awareness towards
health
is the key to
health
and wellbeing. Even when it has become mandatory for
people
to remain at
one
place at
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they can always spare 30 to 40 hours per week for a walk or exercise.
This
perpetual effort is recommended by many
health
trainers to overcome
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lethargy and
thus
remain healthy and fit. Diet is as important as exercise and same time management should be adhered
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making
food
. When
one
prepares
food
at home, customization is
also
possible so everybody can get variety even if it is
one
dish.
Moreover
, it is fresh and organic which will save
people
from taking supplements and their side effects.
Thus
,
one
gets a full package of quality, quantity and
health
. To conclude,
human
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body is as
such
very honest and always shows how it is affected by
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external and internal factors so the only awareness of
health
will contribute to
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle and will keep
one
safe from
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serious
health
problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • genetics
  • nutritional awareness
  • processed foods
  • fast food
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative measures
  • tax incentives
  • urban planning
  • community gardens
  • wellness initiatives
  • dietary guidelines
  • physical fitness
  • calorie-dense
  • portion control
  • metabolic rate
  • health literacy
  • food deserts
  • work-life balance
  • junk food
  • BMI (Body Mass Index)
  • non-communicable diseases
  • food labeling
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