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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It has been over a thousand years since the
first
 university in the world has been built, and some cultures have been left in the present day. The best case is
students
 need to
study
 only in the
class
.
However
,
this
 example
also
 has been adjusted over time.
For instance
, some universities have changed some courses from in-
class
 to online for their
student
 to
study
 anywhere or even anytime. The following paragraph will be discussing the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 change.
Therefore
, the conclusion has been reached. On the one hand, for disadvantages,
Firstly
, I believe that
student
’s motivation while studying from the online
course
 will lower than
study
 in
class
 because of many factors,
such
 as the atmosphere between the
classroom
 and their room, usually in the
classroom
, the atmosphere in the
classroom
 seems to perfect for the
student
 to
study
 more than their room.
Secondly
, the interaction between
students
 and their teachers, usually for the online
class
,
students
 cannot interact with the
teacher
 like when they
study
 in
class
.
For example
, some
students
 like to ask their
teacher
 about curious things in a topic, while studying online if these
students
 want to ask something from the
teacher
, it will make some
students
 waste of time listening to the
teacher
.
On the other hand
, an online
course
also
 provides advantages for their
student
. Perhaps the best example is since they do not require to
study
 in the
classroom
, they can have more free time because they just wake up and sit in front of their laptop and join an app for the online
course
, and the other advantages from the online
course
, which is they can record the
class
 for later if they need to review their topics. In summary, I believe that some universities that offer an online
course
 might just want their
student
 to have an easy life and not be too stressed about their
study
.
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