Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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of students study visit
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charge admission fees while some are free. In
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we will discuss how charging fees has more pros than cons. The biggest disadvantage of charging
money
while going to
galleries
and
museums
will be that lower society of people will not able to visit these places too. A poor person earns very little wage per day and in that
money
only he has to feed his family. So, How will he and his children even think of going to picture
galleries
? It will be hinder for them to visit these places. Another disadvantage is related to the
first
one, When these children will not be allowed to enter
art
museums
, they will not be able to enhance their knowledge in these fields.
Moreover
, they will not be able to explore their mind as a study that a child mind gets more evolved by visiting places like
museums
and
galleries
.
However
, I think advantages have outnumbered the disadvantages as charging
money
will help in many ways.
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charged
money
will be used to make these
galleries
and
museums
more embellished.
Also
, With that
money
, more and more new unique pieces of
art
will be bought and will help in exploring and expanding these
galleries
and
museums
. When youth will come to see these distinctive paintings and other items it will enhance their creativity of thinking. To conclude, I would say that
although
, there are some demerits for poor people if we charged fees
but
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the merits are more like dart
galleries
will be made more extraordinary as well as new ideas of painting will help in exploring unique ideas in minds od individual.
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