More people is moving to the big city to live and work. What are the reasons and results of this trend?

Nowadays
population
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in the urban increasing dramatically, more and more youth
people
prefere
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prefer
to
living
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in
city
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the city
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, they are like a
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butterfly
fliying
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flying
to the light in the night.
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of the big town
look
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more
beautyful
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beautiful
then
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than
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rural
life
.
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last
research the population in urban more
then
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in rural side. Big
city
promisses
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promises
huga
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huge
range
of
possibilites
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possibilities
,
sush
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such
as good
medecin
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medicine
,
knowledges
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knowledge
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and better social
life
. Due to a lot of population in urban, there are
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a
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huge
range
of work at the
sametime
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same time
, and fo cause you can choose what you want. A lot of young
people
go to the
city
to get
good
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education
,
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and
durign
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during
their learning time in the bit
city
their start to like
life
in the urban and they feel
life
more comfortable in it. Especially
who
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those who
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take good
knowladge
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knowledge
, they understand
life
in the
cournty
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country
county
will be
terrable
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terrible
for them and they can't
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realise
release
their potential. But viсe versa
trands
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trends
also
take a place, but
quantity
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the quantity
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of
this
trend is less. So what we have at
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finally
, due to urban
life
take
big
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a big
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range
of
environment
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resources and
people
who live in the
city
don't
realase
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realize
realise
exactly how the effect to
environment
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the environment
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.
Also
due to huge
range
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people
prefere
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prefer
live in the urban,
cityes
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cities
are increasing and
occupie
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occupied
new fields from wild.
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