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It is a good idea to have large public spaces in towns and cities such as parks and squares. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

#idea #spaces #towns #cities #parks #squares
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It is true that most green public
areas
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 are currently replaced by several buildings in cities
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 since
people
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 do not realize how those
areas
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 are important.
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, some
people
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 believe that
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 of
parks
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 and
squares
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 for
people
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 and societies are more than those of business buildings. From my point of view, public spaces should be built because of numerous reasons.
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 of all, creating
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 improves
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 and physical health of
people
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.
People
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 currently stay alone in small square rooms condominiums in the cities, and there are a few public spaces where
people
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 can use to do activities.
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, having
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 and
parks
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 assists
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 to alleviate stress, since they can gather with their peers and families to do activities
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 as picnics and playing sports in huge green places, making them feel relaxed and enjoy.
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, establishing green places encourages
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 to play more sports and exercise as in the cities, spaces are limited for some popular sports
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 as football and running, so green
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 will be new places where attract
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 to enhance physical health.
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, governments can use
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 to support local
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 in certain careers to generate income. To clarify, governments can launch campaigns to promote art or music by allowing groups of artists to establish exhibitions or clubs to attract interested
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.
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 not only appeals to locals but
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 tourists to understand and inspire in art and music.
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, locals can use these public
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 to create and display innovative events and concerts to enhance their opportunities to sell local products and tickets to domestic and foreign customers to gain more income. In conclusion, creating public
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 including
parks
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 and
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 provides numerous advantages to individuals’ physical and mental health.
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, locals
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 gain benefits from
parks
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 by creating special events and gaining revenue from them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • community engagement
  • mental well-being
  • physical activity
  • social interactions
  • aesthetic appeal
  • biodiversity
  • urban congestion
  • air quality
  • communal activities
  • environmental benefits
  • green spaces
  • urban heat islands
  • sense of belonging
  • tourism appeal
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