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Many people nowadays don’t feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons? What can we do to solve this problem?

In the modern world, several
people
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 claim that they feel insecure even in public places or in their own house.
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 sense may come from many reasons together with possible
sollutions
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solutions
 which shall be discussed in
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 essay. One vital reason related to
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 problem is likely
undeveloped
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an undeveloped
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 economy in several communities.
The poverty
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Poverty
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 and low living standard regularly lead to violent behaviours and bad habits of humankind. Taking the
people
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live
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who live
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 in a slum of the city as an example, they are easily aggressive and
agains
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against
 the rule since they lack
of
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the knowledge about law and be obsessed with alcohol or drug.
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, they will rob or steal for making the ends meet. Another serious reason is that most
people
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 usually complain about the justice of police forces. Many
people
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 said that they rarely look for the assistance of police because they do not believe or may beneath under more
troubles
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trouble
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. One possible solution to
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 problem is for the
gorvernment
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government
 to enhance more budgets to increase the life’s
condition
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conditions
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 of
impoverish
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impoverished
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 communities.
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,
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capital management could construct new schools for poor
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 and children who don’t have enough money for education, since knowledge always takes a key role in the development of
human
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humans
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.
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, the police and law
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enforcement
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enforcements
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enforcement
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 should have more actions in solving the illegal actions which could restore the trust of society in the law. Strengthening the security force or transparency in the process of illegal cases are
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feasible
sollutions
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solutions
which
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that
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 could be seen as bright examples. In conclusion, there are many causes for the unsafe feeling of
people
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especially
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 in
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 chaotic era. I think the actions of
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government
governemt
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the governemt
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 are
the
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a
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 significant
necessarities
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necessities
necessaries
 to maintain
the
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a
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 safe environment for
society
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the society
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.

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